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The following table of contents has several headings or subheadings that either should be specified more or should be made parallel. Click on those headings or subheadings in the order that they appear. Information related to this exercise can be found on pages 37 to 40 in The Craft of Scientific Writing. For this exercise to work effectively, do not override the default colors of this page.






Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Background
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Implanting Fetal Tissue
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
What Are the Costs?
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix












































Congratulations, you have identified the first problem.

Discussion: The heading "Background" just doesn't communicate enough. The revised heading "Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease" conveys much more.

Find the next problem.


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Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Implanting Fetal Tissue
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
What Are the Costs?
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix







































Congratulations, you have identified the second problem.

Discussion: The subheading "Results of Pallidotomy" is inherently non-parallel because a single subheading has nothing to be parallel with. There are two ways to revise: one being to remove the subheading, the other being to add a second subheading.

Find the next problem.


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Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Theoretical Principles of Pallidotomy
Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Implanting Fetal Tissue
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
What Are the Costs?
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix







































Congratulations, you have identified the third problem.

Discussion: The subheading "Implanting Fetal Tissue," a participial phrase, is not parallel with the first subheading, "L-Dopa Drug Therapy," which is a noun phrase. One solution, to convert this second subheading to a noun phrase, is given below.

Find the next problem.


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Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Theoretical Principles of Pallidotomy
Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Fetal Tissue Implants
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
What Are the Costs?
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix







































Congratulations, you have identified the fourth problem.

Discussion: The subheading "What Are the Costs" is not parallel with the first two subheadings. One solution, to convert this third subheading to a noun phrase, is given below.

Find the final problem.


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Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Theoretical Principles of Pallidotomy
Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Fetal Tissue Implants
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
Costs of Treatments
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix







































Congratulations, you have identified the final problem.

Discussion: The heading "Appendix" does not communicate enough information. One solution is to assign a title.


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Evaluation of a Neurosurgery
That Treats Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease

Introduction
Symptoms of Parkinson's Disease
Pallidotomy Treatment of Parkinson's

Theoretical Principles of Pallidotomy
Test Results of Pallidotomy
Alternative Treatments of Pallidotomy
L-Dopa Drug Therapy
Fetal Tissue Implants
Comparison of Treatments
Effectiveness of Treatments
Side Effects of Treatments
Costs of Treatments
Conclusions and Recommendations
Appendix: Regions of the Brain Affected by Parkinson's Disease



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